This si story that i wrtited in wrting this story is a boy that live with her father that the father is no her father: Mateo live with his father in a little town in England.Mateo was 12 year old, he went to school, he liket plaing football and he lovet his father.
One day Mateo was not feeling well.His father took him to Hospital.There the doctor discovered a dissease and they said that he bad problem in the kiney .His father could give him a kidney to survive
Every day thought that the problem was Noh diferente to solve Doctors talked to Mateo’s father explaing the procedure,but the father started crying and the doctor tried to calma him down .after a Few minuts ,he good the truth Mateo was not his son
Jorge,
ResponderEliminarYour story is very sad :(
Remember to re read before posting. There are many typing mistakes, for example: "Noh diferente".
Also, there are many tense mistakes:
-the past of write is wrote
-Mateo liveD, not live
-loveD, not lovet
There are spelling mistakes as well: playing, disease, minutes...
Check punctuation as well (capital letters, periods...).
The ending is not very clear. Could the father donate his kidney or not?
Mark: 6,50 (six fifty)